You may discover as you read these essays that the thesis statements don't appear for several paragraphs. Do you see any problem with this? Or is it an effective way to begin an article?
What else could the authors have improved in these essays? What did they do well?
In "The Fate and Future of Food," the author was very broad in the beginning paragraphs. The first time I can see that the topic is narrowed is in the sixth paragraph.The first five paragraphs have several ideas that were not even touched in the essay. I was very confused what the essay was going to be about. Did anyone feel the same way?
ReplyDelete-Cailyn Holcomb
I completely agree. The article was very hard to follow in that there was no direction to it. I never knew what exactly I was supposed to be taking from each sentence.
DeleteI did like the research that they did. the sources were really well thought out. however, I felt that they took to long to get to the thesis point. Did you like the topic or did you think it was to broad of a topic.
DeleteMadeline Meyer
I think it was a great topic. I feel the same way about the thesis and how look he took to get to the point.
DeleteParris Scott
I think that this article was harder to follow because of how broad the author made the topic.
Delete- Sal Mouhammad
DeleteI agree. It was a little tough to read and follow.
DeleteKatie H.
In the article concerned with the worth of student evaluations, I felt the author did not completely understand how the dynamics of student and professor life works. It seemed that the author assumed things and jumped to conclusions that just could not be clearly drawn without more evidence. Because of all of these things I found the article to be written impulsively without a clear plan of thought. Does anyone disagree?
ReplyDeleteI agree. That's a big problem with essays like this one. It is very difficult not to make assumptions. I have issues with it myself sometimes!
DeleteCailyn Holcomb
I agree too, essays shouldn't just be written on an opinion. There has to be evidence to back up the opinion at least. The article about student evaluations could have been done better.
Delete- Melanie H.
DeleteI agree as well, the authors opinion needs more factual evidence to make the point more clear and understandable.
DeleteOne thing that I have noticed with these essays that they have done well is they all have very credible sources. There not just some random online article, these topics were actually researched, and they used many sources not just two or three. Anybody else feel they did well with their sources?
ReplyDelete- Melanie H.
I was thinking the same thing. I can tell that a lot of time and effort was put into all the research.
DeleteYeah I agree it says a lot that they found that many resources. The research that went into writing is impressive.
DeleteI agree the sources were well researched and provided great information to the readers.
ReplyDelete-Hope F.
I believe that the author didn't take into account many aspects of student and professor relations. Does anyone else feel the same way?
ReplyDelete-Hope F.
I feel that way to. But overall, I liked the essays and the sources also.
DeleteI also feel the same. I think by adding those things it would have really benefited to the article.
DeleteKatie H.
I also feel the same. Taking account account the many aspects of student-professor relations could half benefited the article greatly.
Delete-Saurab Deepak